Talk:Rio 3 (2021 film) (original)/@comment-122.57.54.205-20181208210222/@comment-98.179.204.174-20190104045512

I have to say that so far, you have an excellent storyline. It fits in well. But it could use a major grammatical makeover. I believe that I could take this story (which I have memorized BTW) and write it up with better grammar and maybe even some dialogue. I will only do so if I have your permission though.